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Let me never say
"I am nothing without you,"
for that would make me nothing altogether,
a hollow creature-
and such a thing can only be a parasite.

Let me never say
"I need you,"
for that is not love.
No man has ever loved opium or heroin,
he despises them even as he craves them.
So I would think of you.

Let me never with shaky countenance and weak bended knee
beg you for anything-
O, let me never grovel!
Let these lips never whisper
"I am not worthy,"
for in saying those words I would make them true.
I just wrote this like 10 minutes ago, so it may need revision. I'll see later. I think it's solid enough.

Title is subject to change, I don't like it that much :/ I'll see though. A lot of things I write and don't like grow on me later for some reason.

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Could you relate to this? This one seems to get a lot of attention and I can't quite figure out why. I don't think it's my absolute best but it gets noticed more than the others and I think it has to do with the subject matter.
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HtBlack Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013
You should make this share-able on Facebook so I can have everyone know how much I still adore this poem.
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Brilliant.
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LandOriginaL Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I share the feeling of this piece. Good work!
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openhandedsmiles Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2010   Writer
I don't think I've ever seen your work before, but I really like this for the form, the repetition, and the overall theme. There are few who have this take on love, and it's refreshing and insightful. :)

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Craazhy Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2010  Professional Writer
I'm essentially just wondering why these are feelings you resist, though I won't assume a reason.

Because a lot of the things you described are things that I get satisfaction from doing. I like being a head over heels puppy to my partners, boy or girl.

But, one thing I can solidly push towards you is that this is a great piece of refined thought and emotion. It's honest and for the author as much as it is for the audience, work that is only for the audience quickly loses its right to be called art, in my humble opinion. This is not one of those instances.

Another plus is that it invokes a very precise feeling, rather than a blanket feeling, which takes more substantial thought from both ends.

Towards technique, it is very clean and eloquent, or not too long to be drawn out, but not too short to be vague. Bravo!
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Craazhy Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2010  Professional Writer
Excuse me: elegant*

Not eloquent.
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BibliolepticAttack Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2010
I like the message. The style isn't for me, though. Not that it's bad... it's just not my thing. Thanks for sharing. :)
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Formlessforce Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2010
Thanks for the read anyway. I can understand that. What IS your style?
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BibliolepticAttack Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2010
Not really sure. I'll get back to you on that. :)
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Veanar Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2010
Very true!
Nicely written. :)
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